Portfolio

Student ID: 08128

Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1A OR 1C

(See: Note 1, below)

0.0. OVERVIEW

Reviews, Posts, Words, and More

(See: Note 2, below.)

1.0. ESSAYS

(See: Note 3, below.)


Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).

1.1. Showcase	Short titles with links to blog posts	Dates yyyy.mm.dd	¶	W	C	L	P	M
2-01a (2009.10.07)	Draft essay 2-01a: my special favorite places	2009/10/08	6	310	7	0	0	0
2-01b (2009.10.21)	Essays 2-01b: My special favorite placese	2009/10/21	7	403	0	0	0	0
(2-01c)
2-02a (2009.11.04)	Essay 2-02a: American culture	2009/10/29	5	417	5	3	0	0
2-02b (2009.11.18)	Essay 2-02b: American music and culture	2009/11/12	5	458	1	3	0	0
(2-02c)
2-03a (2009.12.02)	essay 2-03a: My Story of learning English	2009/11/30	5	532	7	0	0	0
2-03b (2009.12.18/22)	essay 2-03b: My story of learning languages	2009/12/16	8	610	0	0	0	0
(2-03c)
Totals	---	---	36	2730	20	6	0	0

Key:

¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length

W: number of words

C: number of comments

L: number of links

P: number of photos or other graphics

M: number of other media included in post

1.2. Most Improved Essay

(See: Note 4, below.)


Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.

• Essay 2-02b is the most improved essay because it is posted three links and 5 paragraph.
• I wrote more sentence and corrected mistakes to improve it.
  

2.0. COMMENTS

Showcase	Short titles of posts with links	Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd	Numbers of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog*	Social Media and Social Networking Explained	2009/10/14	33	I wrote my opinion and impression.
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog*	Essay (2-01a): ☆☆☆My fairyland☆☆☆	2009/10/14	22	I did my best.
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog*	essay 2-03a: My Story of learning English	2009/12/9	19	I know her opinion.
2.4. Most comments on:	Short titles of posts with link	Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd	Total number of words in comments	Qualities of comments**
2.4.1. Any one of your essays*	essay 2-03a: My Story of learning English	2009/12/9	121	I could know his thinking.
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2009/12/9	---	---
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	139	I wrote my opinion.
2.4.2. Any of your other posts*	Essay 2-02a: American culture	2009/11/4	131	She asked me for her question.
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments?	---	2009/11/4	---	---
2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments?	---	---	128	I answered for her question.

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* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.

2.5. Recent comments display

Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.

• Recent comments are right on my blog.
  

2.6. Additional reflections on comments

• I wanted some comments more many questions.
• I wanted to write more information.

3.0. BOOK REVIEWS

3.1. Showcase	Short titles with links	Dates: yyyy.mm.dd	Words	Comments
Example:	Vampire Killer	2007.05.16	39	1
BR 2-01	Egyptian Adventure	2009/10/7	146	0
BR 2-02	A Rat for House	2009/10/15	323	0
BR 2-03	Kipper and the Giant	2009/10/15	356	0
BR 2-04	Victorian Adventure	2009/10/15	380	0
BR 2-05	Fright in the Night	2009/10/22	103	0
BR 2-06	Land of the Dinosaurs	2009/10/22	128	0
BR 2-07	The Quest	2009/10/22	405	0
BR 2-08	The Carnival	2009/11/9	185	0
BR 2-09	The Bully	2009/11/9	218	0
BR 2-10	Dog in School	2009/11/18	127	0
BR 2-11	Lost in the Jungle	2009/11/18	153	0
BR 2-12	The Flying Carpet	2009/12/16	112	0
BR 2-13	The Go-kart Race	2009/12/16	73	0
BR 2-14	Save Floppy!	2009/12/16	105	1
BR 2-15	Floppy the Hero	2010/1/7	102	0
BR 2-16	The Dream	2010/1/7	106	0
BR 2-17	The Motorway	2010/1/7	136	0
BR 2-18	Flood!	2010/1/13	191	0
---	---	Totals:	3349	1

Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).

3.2. Best Book Review

Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.

• My best book review is BR 2-18 because I can write my opinion and some information.
• I wrote its story easily on my original.
• Any other books are interesting, but it is the one what is serious.
  

4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA

Showcase	Yes	No
4.1. Does your blog display an archive?	√
4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts?	√
4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month?	√
4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar?	√
4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar?	√
4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately):	---	---
"books" (plural) AND "reviews" (plural)	√
"essays" (plural) AND "portfolios" (plural, without "proto-")	√
"quickposts" (plural, with no space between quick and posts)	√
"links" (plural) AND "media" (plural)		√
"movies" (plural) AND "websites" (plural)	√
"brainstorms" (or "brainstorming"), "essay prep.," AND "free-writing" (or "free-writes")	√
4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels?	√
How many other labels have you attached to three (3) or more posts? 11 other labels attached to three or more posts	---	---
Label blog (25) blogs (22) books (30) essay (3) essay prep (3) essays (14) favorites (5) reviews (33) revisions (4) speaking (8) websites (3)	---	---
4.3. Links and media	---	---
4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics?	√
Does your blog profile include a photo or graphic representation?		√
How many of your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? 11 posts including photos or other graphics	---	---
4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links?	√
How many of your posts this semester include three (3) or more links? 3 posts including three or more links (including this portfolio!)	---	---
4.3.3. Does your blog include other media?		√
How many of your blog posts this semester include other media? 0 posts including other media	---	---
What kind(-s) of media have you included in posts this semester? Please list the kinds here: ... ... ...	---	---
What media content that you originally produced, if any, do your blog posts for this semester contain? Please list and explain each item briefly, and add short links and dates (yyyy.mm.dd) for reference. ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date) ... (short link, date)	---	---

4.4. Overall presentation

What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.

1. I posted many my diary with some photos.
2. I used different color any other students on my blog.
   
3. I put two pictures who are my favorite singer and actress.
   

5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT

Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).

• I think homework is hard for me, but it made my English ability higher.
  
• I didn't keep my all comments for classmates, so Portfolios is difficult for me.
• I think it is hard for us to write 15000 words.
  

6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS

• I should write my blog at least three times a week.
• I think it is better to post some media.
• I think it is better to post more pictures.
  

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Notes:

1. This portfolio template derives from Writing Studio Blog templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc (2007-08), Writing III, §§1a & 1c, Writing IV: Portfolio, §§1a & 1c (2008-09), and the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III.
2. Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
3. The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
   
4. The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.

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All Night!!

On January 11, after the class reunion, I went to a continuation of a party at another place with my friends. We walked to another “izakaya” At there, I drunk a lot too, but I didn’t eat a lot, because I was full. There were some girls and some boys. We talked about a lot of things. For example, about lover, about school and so on. After a continuation of a party, we went to “karaoke” We were singing and talking long long time! We break up at am 6:00 on January 12.

The picture is my boyfriend^^He is not angry! He didn't prepare for picture^^;
(111 words)

A coming-of-age celebration

On January 11 is Coming-of-Age Day. In my city, we had a coming-of-age celebration. I’m going to write about it.

I got up at am 3:30 on January 11, and I went to a beauty salon with my father and my sister. At there, I was made up my face and my hair. I was exciting! I liked it very much. My sister said “It is so nice!” After that, I walk to my dressing room. My long-sleeved kimono is purple. After I changes coming-of-age celebration style, I went to my cousin’s house to see my grandfather. There, I took some pictures with my grandfather. He looked happy. I came back my house, I had breakfast and prepared for coming-of-age celebration. At am9:00, my father took my friend Kei and I to hall “Yamaga Culture Center” We gathered with my friends Kana, Remi and Ayumi. I met a lot of my friends. We talked each other a few time. At am10:00, coming-of-age celebration was started. It finished for an hour. Then, I took a lot of pictures with my local friends, high school days friends and other friends. Of course we took all of local member. I was in the center of front. After that, we met some junior high school teacher. It made me miss the junior high school days. I was happy because junior high school teachers remember me! After all of coming-of-age celebration, I went back my house with my boyfriend Tatuya. We took some picture with my family. Then, at pm 4:00, I went my elementary school to open “Time Capsule” There were not all of people, but some people came. I hugged with my elementary school teacher. When I got my Time Capsule, I feel both miss and shy. At pm 6:00, I walk to izakaya “hakataichibanndori” with my friends. We had a meeting of an alumni at there. There were about 70 people. It was great the percentage of attendance. I talked almost everyone. I enjoyed very much.

(351 words)

1/8 At Kumasann

On January 8, I went to school to attend Listening class. After that, I came back home and I slept prepare for tonight. At night, I went drinking for izakaya named “Kumasann” with my boyfriends, my cousin and my cousin’s boyfriend. My cousin’s boyfriend, my boyfriend and I have been friends since we were high school students, but it was the first time to drinking with. My cousin and I have wanted to drink with 4 members for a long time. We ate and drank for 3 hours. My sister came too. We talked a lot of things. We took a lot of pictures too. I had a very good time there.

(118 words)

My friend is Mama

Today, I’m going to write about my friend Megumi. She and I have been friend for 14 years. When she was 16 years old, she gave up high school and get pregnant. As soon as she realized that, she called me and came to my house. When I heard that at first, I was so surprised. She decided to give birth. Of course I agree with her. When she was 17 years old, she gave a birth. Her daughter is so cute!!! Her name is Hina. Now, she is 3 years old. Megumi is good mother. She always gets up early, she makes lunch box for her husband, she cleans room, she hung the washing everyday. I can’t do that. I think, she is growing day by day.

On January 4, I went to Kumamoto city to do nail art with her. We talked about each other. I had a very good time.

(168 words) Total: 11,553

Shopping

January 2, I got up at noon. After I had a lunch, I went to Kumamoto city to shopping with my sister. At first, we went to GUCCI in “Tsuruya” to buy my sister’s wallet. At there, there are a lot of nice wallets. However, all of them are very expensive. My sister decided the one. I also like it very much. It’s a great wallet. She spent almost all “otoshidama” She said “This is the last time of otoshidama, so I want to buy something what is used for a long time” She looks very happy. Next, we went to PARCO. There, I bought a close at EGOIST. It is very cool! I like it very much. Then, I bought a boots. I have wanted black one for 2 months. I am so happy!!!

(143 words)Total: 11,385

New Year's Day

I’m going to write about my New Year’s day. At night On December 31, my boyfriend Tatsuya came my house. I ate “toshokoshi soba” with my family and with him whole watching CDTV. After I said everyone “A Happy New Year”, I slept a little with him. We waked up at am 4:30, because we went to see sunrise with our friends “Shouta and Kazuka” They went come for us. We went to “kuratake” at Kyokushi. However it was snowl and roads were freeze. We couldn’t go the top of mountain, but we enjoyed driving. Then, we went to “hatsumoude” at Kikuchi shrine. At there, we pay a visit and took some pictures. After that, we went back home. New Year’s Day morning, I ate “osechi” and “zouni”. Did you eat them? In my house, we ate them every year. After the breakfast, we went a visit to a grave. It is an event for every year too. Then, we went to my cousin’s house. There is my grandfather too. At there, we had a good time. Then, we came home and I prepare for go to my cousin’s house for the night with my sister. At first, I ate dinner at “Joy full” with my sister Misato and my cousin Kana. I ate a humbeurger. Then, we went to “battennno yu” Ti is a great spa. I often go to here. I take a spa for an hour. Then, we went back mu cousin’s house, and sleep.

(267 words) Total:11,242

12/26,27 All Night

I had a very good night on December 26 and 27. I’m going to write about it. On December 26 night, I went to my boyfriend’s house. He was getting ready for out. I was wait him. After he finished prepare, we went our friends house. The member is Shouta, Kazuka, Tamiya and Fumiko. Shouta and Kazuka will marry for March 14. Then, we went to Kumamoto city to drink! We went “Jone low” It is so smart bar. At there, we drank and ate a lot for 2 hours. However, I couldn’t drink, because I am handle keeper. After that, we went to “lound one” to play bowling by my drive. I couldn’t drive well because it was my boyfriend’s car. It is so big, but my car is small. I drive cautiously. At “lound one”, there were a lot of people to waiting bowling. We had to wait at least 2 hours. So, we changed us minds! We did “supoccha”. We can a lot of things. For example. Small bowling, basketball, tennis, golf, fishing, roller skating, and so on. We played almost all of them. It made me so funny but, we were tired so much. There are many massage chairs. We slept a little there. We waked up at am5:00 on December 27. We were back each house and slept a lot. I had a very good time.

(252 words)

12/24.25 Happy X'mas!

I’m late for write about my happy Christmas. I want to write about it, so I’m going to write Christmas. Let’s come back 2009!

At December 24, I had classes. After I attended classes, I was hurry to go home. I had a dinner for chicken with my family, and took a bath. After that, I was getting ready for a surprise! At first, I went my friend house. At there, I borrowed a dress. It is not a normal dress. It is the Santa Claus! I put on it under the coat. Next, I went to my boyfriend’s house. Of coarse He don’t know that I put on Santa Claus. After we talked about something, I put off my coat!!! My boyfriend surprised very much!!! He said “Wooooooooow!!!!! You are so cute!!!” I successes my surprise plan. I’m so happy. We took a lot of pictures for our memories. Then, I ate a Christmas cake with him. It was a chocolate cake. We like chocolate very much. I was satisfied this Christmas.

(186 words)

BR 2-18: Flood!

I chose “Flood!” for the last one of Book Reviews. I have read books which are interesting or funny. Almost of books are about magic key. However I want to read serious book, so I chose this book.
I’m going to write this story. It had been raining for days. The storm came in the middle of the night. The rain beat on the roof of the house and it lashed against the windows. It was so loud. In the morning, there is flooded all of place. The car had broken down, the school was closed, floods water had come in and so on. The next day, some fire officers came to the street. They wore big, long boat. Everyone got in, and they went to a hall in the town. When the floods were over they went back home, but the floods were covered in mud. They cleaned their house.
I have never experienced floods. I think, it is very dengerous. I don’t want to experience it. If it attack my hometown, I bring my treasures and take my grandmother.

Record
Roderick, Hunt.(2001). Flood!. England: Oxford University.

(191 words)

BR 2-17: The Motorway

This time, I read “The Motorway”, I'm interested in the motorway. This is the reason why I chose this book. My hometown, Kamoto has not a motorway, but it will be made in the future. I think, motorway is very useful and convenient when we go anywhere. However, it sometimes breaks our environment. It is bad things. This story also like that. Children want to enjoy with friends in the good place, but some people will make a motorway. Then, a boy found a flower which is vey rare. Therefore, the motorway did not make.

These days, I'm interested in the news which the motorway’s price is cheep in the holyday. It is very attractive. I got a driver’s license about two years ago, and I like driving so much, so I want to go somewhere.

(136words) Total:


Record
Roderick, Hunt.(2003). The Motorway. England: Oxford University.

BR 2-16: The Dream

I read "The Dream" This book has a dragon on this cover. I'm interested in dragon, so I chose this book. I'm going to write this story easily. One night, a girl couldn't sleep well. Then, her father told her a story. It was about dragon. She dreamed about dragon and the dragon is very nasty. She can't sleep more than before. Then, her mother told her dolphin story. She slept well.
If I have a dream with dragon, I can't sleep too! Why dose her father tell her dragon story? I don't know. If can choose a dream tonight, I want to dream about cake!

(106 words)
Record
Roderick, Hunt.(1986). The Dream. England: Oxford University.

BR 2-15: Floppy the Hero

I read "Floppy the Hero" I like him very much, because he is kind, cute and powerful! This is the reason why I chose this book. I'm going to write this story easily. One day, there is a fire. Everyone ran to see. A little dog barked and barked, and Floppy jumped in the window! As soon as he went in to he house, he ran out with some puppies! He is a hero.
What a good dog he is! Don't you think so? After I read this book, I like him more than before. I want to a dog like him.

(102 words)
Record
Roderick, Hunt. (1989).Floppy the Hero. England: Oxford University.